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I loved a girl – she smelled like August melancholy,
sweeter still,
she carried the scent of festival emotions,
tempered by the midnight flames
and fireflies' glow.

I loved a girl – her hair, the gentle hue of embers,
reflected dancing candlelight,
while in her eyes, as brown as mahogany,
I discovered tiny galaxies,
but most importantly – I saw my smile.

I loved a girl – I sensed her heartbeat,
playing to the rhythm of my breath.
Her every word,
imprinted tender cherry blossoms,
onto my soul.

I loved a girl – her lips tasted like morning air
cool against my heavy forehead,
her skin, softer than satin threads,
played games with the waning moonbeams -
its gravity, I could not resist, like the Sun,
cannot escape the zenith, on Summer solstice.

I loved a girl – she made me happy,
and sadly - I love her still.
I am really proud with myself with this one, hope you like it too.
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SenGoesRawr Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014
I don't know why it is, but when I get heartbroken, I purposely look for poems that tells about heartbreak/one sided love and other topics, that are going to make me even more sad.
But I love it.
And I also hate it.

And I also love this poem.
I kinda knew how this poem was going to end, cause it was just like reading my thoughts on a paper, written by someone else, and damn is it written well!

Thank you.
Though it feels a bit strange to say it when I got even more sad after reading this.
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Professional General Artist
Thank you! I hope it hasn't made you that sad though...
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SenGoesRawr Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014
Nothing I can't get over! to fall again, heh.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful imagery in this, and then the bittersweet ending that I wasn't expecting. Really well done.
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Professional General Artist
I am happy this one had an impact, it is my favorite amongst my own pieces :)
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Professional Writer
 This is beautiful. I can really relate.
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Professional General Artist
I am glad to hear :) Thanks!
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Rashavarak Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014
Wonderful imagery and feeling.
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Professional General Artist
Thanks :)
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razureoblivion Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2014
this is lovely
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Professional General Artist
Many thanks :)
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kiki1690 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Student Writer
so beautiful gave me chills! You should be proud!
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2014  Professional General Artist
You are too kind...
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Theoldgreen Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The imagery in this poem is gorgeous! With words like that it paints a wonderful scene
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Professional General Artist
Thank you :)
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AuthorKatieOlson Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Student Writer
You painted a beautiful picture of this person! 
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Professional General Artist
I am happy to hear :) Though it's about no person in particular.
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AuthorKatieOlson Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Student Writer
Well what I meant was you created a seemingly real image of a person. I hope that makes better sense. ^^; 
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2014  Professional General Artist
Yes, I was just saying :P
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AuthorKatieOlson Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2014  Student Writer
Gotcha I just wasn't sure if I was clear. Sometimes my words get mixed in my head so yeah... ^^; 
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Professional General Artist
No problem :)
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prettyflour Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
it's beautiful!
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Professional General Artist
Thanks :heart:
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WishingDreamer5 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist
This is beautiful! I wish I could paint a picture with words, like you do.
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Professional General Artist
Many thanks :heart: If anything, I can advice that writing haiku is a great exercise for improving poetry or it least poetry heavily reliant on images.
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SleepyDayDreamerzzzz Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful poem!
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Professional General Artist
Thank you!
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SleepyDayDreamerzzzz Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome :)
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ailerozn Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014
This is an amazing poem; I love the expressive language and just the poem in general.
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Professional General Artist
That's so nice of you to say :heart: Thanks :)
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Oh my dear lord I love this 
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Professional General Artist
I am happy you do :heart:
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Notebook0601 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
What a wonderful poem, I love the emotion. You should be proud! Clap 
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Professional General Artist
Thanks :heart:
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Notebook0601 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome :)
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TheDawnMarie Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Professional General Artist
really good <3
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Professional General Artist
Many thanks :heart:
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Anninhaxox Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014
You should be. It's quite beautiful!
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Professional General Artist
Why, thank you :)
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Anninhaxox Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014
You're welcome :)
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